tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-308214465210382791.post875541915840709941..comments2024-03-26T01:28:27.414-04:00Comments on It's In The Details: Summer Query Extravaganza 2017 Number 7Michelle 4 Laughshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06876457259362839114noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-308214465210382791.post-79797085966923045112017-07-15T11:32:35.686-04:002017-07-15T11:32:35.686-04:00For sure! Normally the genre is there--and I make ...For sure! Normally the genre is there--and I make sure to say "inspired by pre-Christian Scandinavia" to get that across. <br /><br />Good luck to you as well! Your current project sounds amazing. (:Steerpikehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12771660108569944264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-308214465210382791.post-40890578110477465492017-07-15T11:23:07.784-04:002017-07-15T11:23:07.784-04:00It does sound like an interesting read! If it'...It does sound like an interesting read! If it's fantasy and Viking-inspired, make sure you state that. Thanks for the book recommendation! I have a few Viking books piled on my coffee table. Good luck!<br /> Jean M. Granthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12495227043618994354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-308214465210382791.post-64180449325362461932017-07-15T10:51:16.261-04:002017-07-15T10:51:16.261-04:00ooo! That sounds amazing.
Mine is actually set i...ooo! That sounds amazing. <br /><br />Mine is actually set in a fantasy world where the culture is Viking in nature but not name, if that makes sense? Sort of along the lines of what writers like Guy Gavriel Kay and GRRM do. But it's also set around a similar time, in that elements of it focus on the decline of pagan beliefs, etc. I drew on my medieval studies background, but did a lot of additional research. A recent book you might enjoy that I found immensely helpful is The Conversion of Scandinavia by Anders Winroth. He has a fresh take on how conversion took place, and his argument was very convincing. <br /><br />Aaaaaanyway, thanks so much for the feedback! I'm thinking both you and Michelle are right about the logline-ish part at the beginning. Being a derp, I accidentally deleted the genre line somehow when I was reworking this to send it. :/ <br /><br />I could add more about Lae for sure--maybe I can work that into the paragraph Michelle was suggesting needed a clearer choice for Wytha. <br /><br />Anyway, thanks so much! (:Steerpikehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12771660108569944264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-308214465210382791.post-60344333358265684602017-07-15T10:36:46.306-04:002017-07-15T10:36:46.306-04:00What a terrible query--I'm not even critiquing...What a terrible query--I'm not even critiquing this one. It is just bad and the writer should give up. <br /><br />Ahem.<br /><br />Thanks so much! This was super helpful, as a lot of the areas you pointed out issues were places where I'd taken bits out that I'd been having trouble working in (I should give it another shot, I think, and not be afraid because it's tricky). I'll work harder to incorporate some of the elements you mentioned, and probably cut the logline-y bit up top. <br /><br />It's not own voice exactly, which is why I worry. I'm queer but have never identified as a lesbian (though I have been perceived as one for much of my life). It always leaves me unsure about how to use #ownvoices and what contexts that's meant for. In an earlier version I think I did use it, but later on I didn't want to get dragged in to all the drama over the hashtag on twitter. :/ <br /><br />I'm not sure where the genre disappeared. D: I must have accidentally deleted the sentence when I sent the query along, as it's supposed to be right after the "complete at X words" bit, haha. I am good at the things. <br /><br />Again, thanks so much! (:Steerpikehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12771660108569944264noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-308214465210382791.post-29333053729257618922017-07-15T09:07:46.807-04:002017-07-15T09:07:46.807-04:00You had me at Viking. :)[I am just starting on a p...You had me at Viking. :)[I am just starting on a prequel to a novel, and it has Norse Vikings, albeit it's at the far end of their reign]. I wonder if the hook (the second lone line) should be earlier, dip into the story, then lay out the book title/word count (and yes, genre!). I do like seeing the genre/word count earlier on instead of at the end. I also wonder about Lae. Lae is introduced but we know nothing further. I am able to discern the goal, motivation, and conflict here but it does feel a bit muddled toward the end; like Michelle said, just tightening that up would help. And I agree - the end para should state ownvoices. I also love the comp titles; gives me a vision of it immediately! Although you say pre-Christian time, I do wonder if a year or century would help the readers, too.Jean M. Granthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12495227043618994354noreply@blogger.com