Friday, May 6, 2016

Query Kombat 2016 Agents/Editors and Twitter Party Dates

The big reveal is HERE.





Want to know what agents and editors we have for Query Kombat? WE HAVE TWENTY-EIGHT, AND COUNTING!! There are so many publishing professionals participating, we can’t fit them all on one blog! View one-third of them below, then click on over to Michael’s and Laura's blogs to see the rest. We’ve got both well-established agents/editors and some newer professionals who are actively seeking to build their lists. Query Kombat 2016 is going to be an AWESOME Kontest. 


Don't miss the submission window from May 16 - May 20, 2016!! We’re giving you the whole week to get your entries in! 

And here's a sneak peek at the upcoming twitter party:

May 15th    Before the big days arrives tweet your category and genre. Ask questions about genre if you’re unsure where your manuscript fits.

May 16th  After 8:30AM tweet when you’ve submitted your entry to our QK email. Nerves and jitters can be calmed by sharing with others. All day long tweet out what your entry Nickname is and why you chose it.

May 17th   Day 2 of submissions! Judges get fun secret names. Entrants get to create nicknames. Your poor hosts are left out. Create nicknames for Laura, Michael and Michelle!  (Keep it clean. We blush easily.) And tweet your favorite comp title.

May 18th   Submission Hump Day! Tweet your main character’s name and a special tidbit about them. See what sorts of names are popular and if anyone else shares MC’s names with you.

May 19th    Tweet what you find the hardest about writing. Is it keeping out telling? Writing action scenes? What’s hard for you? Anyone have tips for making them easier?
May 20th   Last day to submit! Say hi to an entrant you’ve never talked to. Wish them luck in the slush round. If you need to let out some nerves, see if your new friend will lend an ear.

May 21st     Tweet something about how you write. Do you use music or prefer silence? Morning or late at night? We celebrate our differences.

May 22nd     Tweet us your villain’s name and something evil about them.

May 23rd      If you’re looking for some beta readers or CP, now is the time to tweet about it.

May 24th     Tweet us your favorite line from your novel. If you read any you like, favorite it. Have any favorite lines from a novel that’s not yours? Tweet those too!

May 25th     Tweet your thanks to the agents, editors, and judges of Query Kombat 2016. They’re dedicating a lot of time to help out. The least we can do is take a day to celebrate them!

May 26th      The big reveal is tomorrow! Tweet the title of a soothing song that is helping you get through the day before the picks are revealed. Hold hands and sing Kumbaya lyrics like the band of friends you’ve become. (We’ll be running around like crazy gerbils getting everything ready.)



For more information on how to enter when the window opens, please click here. Otherwise, scroll down to meet the agents and editors!






Lydia Moëd
Lydia Moëd came to Canada from the UK, where she worked as a foreign rights executive for UK publishers including Usborne Publishing and Elwin Street Productions. She has also worked as a freelance literary translator and editor, and as a bookseller at Foyles in London. In addition to handling foreign rights for The Rights Factory's children's and YA list, she is building her own list of clients for representation.
For fiction, she is most interested in acquiring science fiction and fantasy, though she also enjoys magic realism, historical fiction and stories inspired by folklore from around the world. For non-fiction, she is interested in narrative non-fiction on a wide variety of topics, including history, popular science, biography and memoir. She would love to bring more translated literature into English, and particularly welcomes queries by authors from marginalized groups.


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Rena Rossner

Rena is a graduate of Johns Hopkins University’s Writing Seminars Program, where she double-majored in poetry and non-fiction writing. She studied at Trinity College, Dublin and holds an MA in History from McGill University in Montreal, Canada. She worked at bookstores in four countries, has written extensively for The Jerusalem Report and The Jerusalem Post, and worked in PR, grant-writing, and website development at The Jerusalem Foundation. She is a writer of both fiction and poetry as well as the author of the cookbook EATING THE BIBLE, which has been translated into five languages.

Rena is interested in representing Science Fiction, Fantasy and Speculative Fiction in all genres, Adult Literary and Contemporary Fiction especially Upmarket Women’s Fiction, Historical Fiction and Thrillers. She is also actively seeking Young Adult, Middle Grade and Picture Books.



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Victoria Lowes

Victoria Lowes was born and raised in Queens, New York and graduated from the City University of New York, Queens College. Before joining the Bent Agency, she completed internships at Serendipity Literary and the Carol Mann Agency. She now lives on Long Island and in her spare time she can be found teaching dance classes for young students or watching re-runs of The Office.
I’m looking for both commercial and literary fiction as well as young adult titles. My favorite genres are historical fiction, suspense, mysteries, upmarket women’s fiction, and romance.

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Penelope Burns


Penelope Burns is the newest member of Gelfman Schneider/ICM Partners. She came to the agency as an intern after graduating from Colgate University in 2012. Currently, as an agency assistant, Penelope is looking to a build a list of her own. She is interested in Literary and Commercial fiction and non-fiction, as well as a variety of Young Adult and Middle Grade. 

I'm actively looking for YA/MG novels with a unique voice or an unreliable narrator, or an interesting and unique premise. I'd also love to see a YA contemporary romance, or a clever MG with a lot of humor. I am not seeking adult thrillers. 




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Alison Weiss
Alison Weiss is an Editor at Sky Pony Press, after six-and-half years at Egmont. As a kid, it was not unusual to find her huddled under the covers on a Saturday morning with a stack of books rather than downstairs watching cartoons. Reading and writing have always been passions, but sharing that passion with others wasn’t always as easy. That is until she found the children’s publishing world.

Her focus is chapter books through YA, and she loves everything from heartwarming middle grade to edge-of-your seat thrillers to swoony romance. She has worked with New York Times best-selling author Jessica Verday (Of Monsters and Madness), multi-Agatha Award winner Penny Warner (The Code Busters Club series), YALSA-award winning Sarah Cross (Kill Me Softly and Tear You Apart), J&P Voelkel (The Jaguar Stones), Micol Ostow (Amity), Kristen Lippert-Martin (Tabula Rasa), Sasha Dawn (Oblivion), and Sarah McGuire (Valiant), among others. She also assisted on Christopher Myers's H.O.R.S.E., which won a 2013 Coretta Scott King Illustrator Honor Award and the 2014 Odyssey Award. Follow her on Twitter @alioop7.





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Jennifer Azantian

Founder Jennifer Azantian graduated with a B.S. in clinical and developmental psychology from the University of California, San Diego where she was an executive editor for the Trition Psychology Report. In 2011, she began her agenting career, first as an intern and then as an assistant and associate, at the Sandra Dijkstra Literary Agency. In 2014, while working with senior agent and entertainment lawyer Paul Levine, Jennifer opened her own agency specializing in speculative fiction. 



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Stacey Donaghy

Stacey Donaghy is a strong advocate for her writers.  She believes in helping to build the careers of her clients, with long term goals in mind.

Stacey began her career with the Corvisiero Literary Agency in New York, where she wore many hats from team manager and trainer, to intern, to agent.   This coupled with her  experience and formal education and training in the areas of  Management, Social Services and Adult Education, Stacey brings a wealth of technical and professional experience to the literary world.  As a manager in the field of Education & Training, her roles have included people management, curriculum development, academic editing, marketing, creative design, publishing, proposal writing, contract negotiations and public speaking.  Her training also includes Principled Negotiation Techniques as it applies to relationships and contracts.

Stacey represents NY Times, USA Today, and Amazon Bestselling Authors, as well as Authors who have been nominated or have won awards for various works.



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Caitlin Rubino-Bradway

I joined the LKG Agency in 2008, thereby disproving the theory that no English major ever does anything with their degree.  Before that I worked at another literary agency, Don Congdon Associates, where I had the behind-the-scenes thrill of seeing Kathryn Stockett’s The Help first come in (and getting one of the first reads). And before that I was getting my Masters in English and Publishing from Rosemont College. I have enjoyed my apprenticeship under Lauren very much, and I am now actively looking to build my own list, which includes (after a surprisingly minimal amount of begging and pleading on my part), securing Lauren’s agreement to open the agency to considering middle grade and young adult fiction.

In my spare time, I am an author in my own right (or is that write?).  My first book, Lady Vernon and Her Daughter, which I co-wrote with my mother, was released by Crown in 2009.  We also contributed to Jane Austen Made Me Do It, published by Ballantine in 2011.  My first middle grade novel, Ordinary Magic, was published by Bloomsbury Children’s in 2012.



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Jackie Lindert

Jackie earned her B.A. in English in her home state of Wisconsin before trekking to Colorado to attend the Denver Publishing Institute. Her first job in publishing was as a Subsidiary Rights assistant at Penguin Random House, following an internship at none other than New Leaf Literary. After spending two years back at New Leaf as a literary assistant, Jackie now directly assists Joanna Volpe.

Fun Facts: She grew up in the Water Park Capital of the World and has a cat named Humphrey Bogart.



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Leon Husock

Before he joined the L. Perkins Agency, Leon was an associate agent at Anderson Literary Management.  He graduated from Bard College with a BA in Literature and from there went on to attend the well-known Columbia Publishing Course, where he decided he wanted to be an agent.

He has a particular interest in science-fiction and fantasy, especially fantasy with non-Western European inspired settings and cultures (e.g. Leigh Bardugo’s Russian-inspired fantasy).  He also loves young adult and upper middle-grade of all stripes, as well as genre mashups (e.g. fantasy westerns, noir + almost anything else, etc).  Strong characters are, of course, a must.



Saturday, April 30, 2016

Query Kombat 2016 Free Pass

The free pass post got buried, so I thought I'd boot it back to the top. To enter the free pass, click this link and it will take you back to the original post. 

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Friday, April 29, 2016

Query Kombat 2016 Judges

Time for our AMAZING lineup of judges for this year's Query Kombat tournament. Many of them were contestants in prior contests. We've worked hard to find authors that form a diverse group of opinions, talents, and specialties from all categories and genres.



Query Kombat would not be possible without the wonderful people who donate their time to help. For this month-long contest, we've recruited thirty-six industry professionals to critique entries and vote for a winner of each matchup. Each and every one of these judges is participating out of the kindness of their heart, so please join the QK Crew in thanking them for volunteering.

THANK YOU!

Remember that the best way to thank judges for their time is to buy their books. Michelle has compiled a Goodreads list to make finding the judges' books easier, and they’ve written some great stuff. Also be sure to follow the judges on Twitter. On May 11, we'll be hosting a Twitter party where writers can reach out to the judges and ask questions about their entries, writing, querying, etc. Join us at 3:00 p.m. and 9:00 p.m. EST. The hashtag will be #QKChat

There are so many judges this year, we're breaking the bios down across all three host blogs. Go here to see them all: Mike, Laura, and Michelle. For a rule refresher, click here. To donate, click here.

Now, without further ado, I'd like to introduce one set of judges for Query Kombat 2016.





Heather Van Fleet is stay-at-home-mom turned book boyfriend connoisseur. She’s the wife of her high school sweetheart and the mother of three amazing little girls. In her spare time, she can be found with her head buried in her Kindle, guzzling down copious amounts of coffee or writing about unattainable, perfect men and the heroines that sweep them off their feet.

Heather has been working in the publishing industry for over five years, and she currently works for BookFish Books as a content editor. She’s represented by Stacey Donaghy of Donaghy Literary, and her Embattled Hearts Series releases with Sourcebooks starting in February, 2017. 


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Jamie Howard is a legal and compliance specialist by day, author by night, and holds a Bachelor’s degree in Art. When she’s not tapping away at the keyboard or capturing the world through her trusty Canon, you can find her binge-watching TV shows, devouring books, and perfecting her gaming skills. She lives with her husband, son, and three dogs in New Jersey, and is almost always awake early enough to see the sun rise, even on the

weekends.

Jamie is the author of Until We Break, Until It’s Right, and the upcoming All The Ways You Saved Me with St. Martin’s Press. She is represented by Jessica Watterson of the Sandra Dijkstra Literary Agency.

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Jamie Zakian is a YA/NA writer and freelance editor. When not writing, she enjoys farming, archery, and blazing new trails on her 4wd quad with her rowdy family. Her debut NA novel Ashby Holler releases June 14th from Limitless Publishing and her YA sci-fi thriller is forthcoming from Month9Books. Check out her website Writer's Retreat or follow her on Twitter Jamie Zakian (@demoness333) | Twitter 
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Kat Hinkel is a thriller writer living in Philadelphia. She is a Pitch Wars 2015 alum and is represented by Jaida Temperly at New Leaf. You can often find her drinking old fashioneds at costume parties, playing music, or (obviously) writing.




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Aden Polydoros grew up in Long Grove, Illinois, and now lives in Arizona. He is a writer of young adult fiction, and represented by Mallory Brown of TriadaUS Literary Agency. When he isn’t writing, he enjoys reading and going on hikes in the mountains. Aden's first book, PANDORA FROM THE CLAY, is due for Summer 2017 from Entangled Publishing, and was one of the manuscripts entered in Query Kombat 2015. 
https://www.facebook.com/aden.polydoros



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Kelly deVos is a Young Adult writer living in Gilbert, Arizona, represented by Kathleen Rushall of the Andrea Brown Literary Agency. Kelly currently serves as an intern to Entangled Senior Editor, Kate Brauning, and is an arts administration intern for the Marooned Journal at Arizona State University. She is also a contributor to the YA Buccaneers and YAgabonds.



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Kimberly Ito writes many angsty things, lately in the form of YA contemporary fiction. When she isn’t writing, she works as a freelance editor, proofreader, and Japanese-English translator. Kimberly grew up in the US and has lived in Japan for roughly half of her life. She currently lives just outside Tokyo with her husband, children, a spoiled Shiba Inu, and an insufferable lap cat.

You can find Kimberly on Twitter: @kimberlyito, or at her website: kimberlyito.com.


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Lisa A. Koosis is a prize-winning short story writer, whose work has appeared in numerous magazines and anthologies, including Family Circle, The Poughkeepsie Journal, and the Hugo-nominated Abyss & Apex.  Lisa is a member of the SCBWI, an ambassador for National Novel Writing Month, and an active member of her local writing community. She is hopelessly addicted to writing contests, anything seashore-related, and accessories (particularly feather earrings and anything with fringe). Although she will forever consider herself a Long Islander, currently Lisa lives in New York’s historic Hudson Valley with her family, both two- and four-legged.  Her debut YA sci-fi novel, Resurrecting Sunshine, will be released by Albert Whitman & Co in Fall 2016.




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Marty Mayberry writes adult and young adult fiction. When she’s not dreaming up ways to mess with her character’s lives, she works as an RN/Clinical Documentation Specialist. She has a BA in International Affairs in German and an Associate’s Degree in Nursing. She lives in New England with her husband, children, and three neurotic cats. She’s a member of SCBWI, YARWA, and a PRO member of RWA, and a PitchWars Mentor. Her young adult sci-fi thriller, PHOENIX RISING, won the 2015 YARWA’s Rosemary Award for speculative fiction.

Twitter: @marty_mayberry



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Sarah Schauerte Reida is a writer, lawyer, and ugly animal advocate. Growing up in the Midwest (Illinois, to be precise), she read everything she could get her hands on, as well as watched many, many movies during her parents' "camping" trips involving electricity and s'mores in a microwave. A member of The Sweet Sixteens, Sarah's debut middle grade novel, Monstervile: A Lissa Black Production, is slated for release in September of 2016 from Sky Pony Press. 

A graduate of Saint Louis University (B.A). and Case Western Reserve University School of Law (J.D.), Sarah makes a living helping veteran business owners compete for federal contracts. She and her husband Scott live in the Atlanta area with their dog and four cats. By the time this biography reaches print, they will probably have acquired another animal. 

Follow Sarah on Twitter at: https://twitter.com/SarahSchauerte. Also, you can access her writing website at: http://www.lissablackproductions.com.




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Wade Albert White is the author of the middle grade novel, The Adventurer’s Guide to Successful Escapes, (selected for the Middle Grade Author Buzz Panel at Book Expo America in 2016), and its sequel, The Adventurer’s Guide to Dragons (and Why They Keep Biting Me), forthcoming from Little Brown Books for Young Readers in 2016 and 2017 respectively. In addition to writing, he teaches part time (mostly to do with ancient languages), draws with his kids (usually robots fighting other robots), and tries to improve his time for running a 10K (sadly he seems to be getting slower rather than faster). Also, he owns one pretend cat and one real one, and they get along fabulously. He is represented by Elizabeth Kaplan of the Elizabeth Kaplan Literary Agency.

Twitter: @wadealbertwhite
Website: wadealbertwhite.com   

           

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When Wendy Nikel isn't traveling in time, exploring magical islands, or investigating mysterious phenomena, she enjoys a quiet life near Utah's Wasatch Mountains with her husband and sons. She has a degree in elementary education, a fondness for road trips, and a terrible habit of forgetting where she's left her cup of tea. Her short fiction has been published by AE,Daily Science Fiction, and elsewhere, and she is a member of the SFWA. She is represented by Richard Curtis.


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Tracy Townsend lives in Bolingbrook, Illinois and teaches English at the Illinois Mathematics and Science Academy. She has studied at DePauw University, the National University of Ireland (Galway), and DePaul University, where she obtained degrees in English, Creative Writing, and Rhetoric. She is a member of the Science Fiction Research Association and other academic organizations, which allows her to write very long things and read them aloud to people who are obliged to behave politely. Her sf/f writing draws on her experience as a lapsed Catholic, assistant martial arts instructor, comics fangirl, tabletop role-player, and obsessive hound for obscure mythology. Inexplicably, other uses for that resume have yet to present themselves. Her work is represented by the effortlessly elegant and classy Bridget Smith of Dunham Lit. Most recently, her short story "Late Arrivals" appeared in Luna Station Quarterly,  Issue 25.
Tracy devotes time she doesn’t have to cooking, gardening, writing, and seriously pondering the treadmill in her basement. She is married to her high school sweetheart, with whom she shares two remarkable children. They are – naturally – named after characters from books.
You can find Tracy on Twitter (@TheStorymatic) more often than she really ought to be.


Thursday, April 28, 2016

Spring Query Extravaganza -- 7

Here we go with another query warm up for Query Kombat.

Please remember these are my thoughts only and I'm just one subjective opinion. Others may feel differently on how to shape a query. 

My next victim willing participant:



Dear [Ms./Mr.][Agent Last Name]:

[Personalize e.g. I understand you are looking for magical Middle Grade books with funny protagonists]. I’m excited to share MIRA AND THE MAGINS with you, which features a science-minded main character with two moms.

As the homeschooled only child of a U.S. patent attorney and an aerospace engineer, twelve-year-old Mira could have already completed her G.E.D. Instead, her moms decided she should spend the past year preparing to apply to Roebling’s Academy, an elite engineering prep-school in Austria. Mira would love nothing more than to study science at Roebling’s, but it’s hard to get her hopes up about admission when her success or failure to get into the Academy also determines whether her moms receive either much needed lab funding or notoriety.

 And then Mira is accidentally assigned an imaginary friend whom only she can see: Gimmer. Hailing from the Unseen Realm where all sorts of magical creatures like him apparently exist, Gimmer’s unique ability to teleport all over the place is driving Mira nuts. But Gimmer refuses to leave because he needs to meet one last quota of imagination magic to apply for a promotion in his world. After centuries of being looked down upon and ignored by his society just because his magical class is a Secondary color, rather than being a Primary or Tertiary color, Gimmer wants to prove to his world that Secondaries are good for more than just being ‘gofors.’

But, unbeknownst to Gimmer and Mira, the corrupt governing body of Gimmer’s world is close to completing a spell that would enable them to enslave all of humanity with their magic. The only missing piece? Gimmer’s teleport power. They’ve been trying to quietly obtain it for years with no success. More drastic measures must now be taken. To siphon his power—a process with a very high fatality rate—the Council captures Gimmer. Mira will have to decide whether to stay the course of her known, successful future that’s been planned for her entire life, or risk everything she believes in to try and save the life of an imaginary friend she didn’t make up.

MIRA AND THE MAGINS is a 68,000 word middle grade Contemporary Fantasy that can be described as Monsters, Inc. meets THE ART OF WISHING by Lindsay Ribar, sans the fur and romance.

As for me, I am a California video game attorney with a film production degree. I thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

With my crazy comments:

Dear [Ms./Mr.][Agent Last Name]:

[Personalize e.g. I understand you are looking for magical Middle Grade middle grade (Subjective, but to me it looks odd when capitalized.) books with funny protagonists]. I’m excited to share MIRA AND THE MAGINS with you, which features a science-minded main character with two moms.

 As the homeschooled only child of a U.S. patent attorney and an aerospace engineer, twelve-year-old Mira could have already completed her G.E.D. Instead, her moms decided she should spend the past year preparing to apply to Roebling’s Academy, an elite engineering prep-school in Austria. Mira would love nothing more than to study science at Roebling’s, but it’s hard to get her hopes up about admission when her success or failure to get into the Academy also determines whether her moms receive either much needed lab funding or notoriety. (This last sentence is rather long. Maybe it can be simplified. Mira would love to study science at Roebling's, but it's hard to get her hopes up--especially when her failure will cost her moms needed lab funding and clients.)

 And then Mira is accidentally assigned (We've taken an abrupt turn, but I'm flowing with it. Who assigned them together? That info might help ground the reader.)  an imaginary friend whom only she can see: Gimmer. Hailing from the Unseen Realm where all sorts of magical creatures like him apparently exist (this gives it a hint of voice), Gimmer’s unique ability to teleport all over the place is driving Mira nuts. (Tie it to the first paragraph.) How is she supposed to study? But Gimmer(I would rewrite this sentence from Mira's POV. Her attempts to give him the cold shoulder or trick him into leaving fall flat.) refuses to leave because he needs to meet one last quota of imagination magic to apply for a promotion in his world. After centuries of being looked down upon and ignored by his society just because his magical class is a Secondary color, rather than being a Primary or Tertiary color,  (Too much unnecessary detail. It's a subplot, not needed for the query.) Gimmer sees Mira as his chance to wants to prove to his world that Secondaries are he is good for more than just being a ‘gofors.’

But, unbeknownst to Gimmer and Mira, the corrupt governing body of Gimmer’s world is close to completing a spell that would enable them to enslave all of humanity with their magic. Their only missing piece? is Gimmer’s teleport power. They’ve been After trying to quietly obtain it for years with no success., Mmore drastic measures must now be taken. The Council captures Gimmer to siphon his power—a process with a very high fatality rate—the Council captures Gimmer. (End the sentence with the most punch-high fatality.) Mira will have to decide whether to stay the course of her known, successful planned out future that’s been planned for her entire life (I think known and successful says the same thing as planned. I liked planned better.), or risk everything she believes in to try and save the life of an imaginary friend she didn’t make up. (she didn't know she loved? the imaginary pain-in-the-bottom she didn't know she loved? The imaginary pain-in-the-bottom she can't live without? Play around with adding more voice to it.) 

MIRA AND THE MAGINS is a 68,000 (It's on the wordy side for MG, but I've seen ms longer sell.) word middle grade Contemporary Fantasy contemporary fantasy that can be described as Monsters, Inc. meets THE ART OF WISHING The Art of Wishing (Keep the comp titles smaller than your title.) by Lindsay Ribar, sans the fur and romance.

As for me, I am a California video game attorney with a film production degree. I thank you for your time and consideration.

Sincerely,

A little trimming to take off some tangent side plot. A little rewording to shorten some sentences. A little added voice. And this query will be all set!

Just remember it's all subjective and change what works for you. I hope this helps. 

Wednesday, April 27, 2016

Spring Query Extravaganza -- 6

Here we go with another query warm up for Query Kombat.

Please remember these are my thoughts only and I'm just one subjective opinion. Others may feel differently on how to shape a query. 

My next victim willing participant:



Sherlock Holmes meets Fullmetal Alchemist when an ex-army doctor teams up with a fey magician to solve his patient's murder. WITCHMARK is a 76,000-word adult fantasy novel with romantic elements set in a world with magic and early 20th-century technology.

Dr. Miles Singer, a veteran returned from a recent war, has faked his death to work at a cash-strapped veteran's hospital. His quiet life hangs in jeopardy when a fatally poisoned patient begs him to find his murderer. Miles promises and the patient dies, but not before he exposes Miles's secret healing powers to a witness. Instead of reporting him as a witch, the witness wants to help Miles investigate.

Miles retraces the victim's last days in the company of Tristan Hunter, a fellow-magician he shouldn't be falling for. They pursue a murderer who steals or destroys evidence faster than they can find leads. When Miles and Tristan discover the secret Miles's patient was murdered to keep, they must choose between ignoring the suffering of the unseen few to live in comfort, or bringing down the technological advancements that millions depend on.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

With my crazy comments:

Dear : (I'm sure the writer just left this off when sending to me.)

Sherlock Holmes meets Fullmetal Alchemist when an ex-army doctor teams up with a fey magician to solve his patient's murder. WITCHMARK is a 76,000-word adult LGBT fantasy novel with romantic elements set in a world with magic and early 20th-century technology. (Intriguing. The word count might be a little low for adult. But I would spell out the type of technology by using examples, such as: airships and steam engines.)

Dr. Miles Singer, a veteran returned from a recent war, has faked his death to work at a cash-strapped veteran's hospital. (Why fake his death? Is there a reason he can't work where he wants? I think explaining this would clear up some questions and provide his motivation.) His quiet life hangs in jeopardy when a fatally poisoned patient begs him to find his murderer. Miles promises and the patient dies, but not before he exposes Miles's secret healing powers to a witness.(I hope the patient revealed him accidentally. But I'm confused. Is Miles the ex-army doctor? Is the witness the magician? That's why maybe it's better to put your genre/word count paragraph last so the reader doesn't form expectations of people they expect to see in the query.) Instead of reporting him as a witch, the witness wants to help Miles investigate.

Miles retraces the victim's last days in the company of Tristan Hunter, a fellow-magician he shouldn't be falling for. (So Tristan is the witness and the fey sorcerer? I would just use his name above and save some confusion. But this makes it sound like they both have magic. The opening paragraph implied only one did. Tristan and Miles. So would this be a LGBT story? That should for sure be in the genre paragraph.) They pursue a murderer who steals or destroys evidence faster than they can find leads. (This doesn't tell us much. I still feel in the dark about the main plot.) When Miles and Tristan discover the secret Miles's patient was murdered to keep (Too vague. You won't entice the reader by keeping them in the dark. What secret?) , they must choose between ignoring the suffering of the unseen few(What suffering?) to live in comfort, or bringing down the technological advancements (What sort of advancements?) that millions depend on.

Thank you for your time and consideration.

I think this query is suffering from vagueness and too few details. It could be that the author is trying so hard to leave something surprising in the manuscript that they are unintentionally hurting their chances. I am unsure of the larger plot beyond a patient being poisoned. I don't know what the antagonist is trying to accomplish or what Miles has to save the world from. There are mentions of technology in the query but not enough world building to show us what sort of technology.

The meat of the query is only two paragraphs. There is plenty of space to expand and gives us the heart of the story by rewriting the vague parts, providing the MC motivation and showing how the problem escalates. It sounds like a fantastic story if we had more details. I hope this helps.