Looks like the Critique Workshop will be smaller than anticipated. Let's see if we can still make it helpful. Critiquing queries not only helps the owner of the query, it also builds valuable skills in what makes a query work and what doesn't. The more you help others with their queries, the more you can learn about how to make your own query successful.
Please leave comments for all three of our entrants. And make those comments as helpful as possible.
If you'd like your query added to the group, contact me in the comments or on twitter.