Monday, June 8, 2015

QK Agent Round: No Such Thing as Coincidence, NA Fantasy

Entry Nickname: No such thing as a coincidence
Title: Coincidences
Word count: 85k
Genre: NA Fantasy


As far as Ami’s concerned, invisibility is good for three things: bank vaults, men’s locker rooms, and saving the world.

For Ami and her partner, Luke, becoming invisible is part of their job. Their mysterious employer assigns them to make “coincidences” happen, from reuniting long lost lovers to toppling empires. For their next job, they must stop a bio-terrorism attack on San Francisco. To pull it off, they’ll have to break into illegal labs and federal buildings that make bank vaults seem easy.

Working side by side to arrange the coincidence, Ami hopes for a chance to push their relationship past the friend-zone. Her telepathic link with Luke has made it hard to keep her feelings secret for so many years. But just when things start to heat up between them, they accidentally alert the FBI to their existence. Now agents are chasing them down hilly streets and invading their homes in the middle of the night.

With three days until the attack, Ami and Luke must escape their FBI tail while keeping their own emotions from getting in the way. That’s not an easy task when their telepathy goes on the fritz and their only lead for who’s behind the plague just might be the one who releases it. With millions of lives hanging in the balance, they’re going to need more than a coincidence to pull it all off.

First 250 Words:

The car Luke rented looked like it had been in a demolition derby. I had to hand it to rental place—keeping the bumper on with chicken wire was some kind of sorcery.

My head hit the window as we bounced over a crater in the Mexican toll road. I rubbed my forehead, giving Luke, my partner, a pointed look.

He didn’t notice. No surprise there—he’d ignored the last three questions I’d asked. Before I thought better of it, I reached over, chose an arm hair, and plucked it out by the root.

Hey! What was that for?” Luke rubbed his arm while his thoughts seared into my mind. One of the bonuses of our position: telepathic link. It was great for communicating while invisible, but a serious liability when it came to privacy. Unfortunately, the switch that kept my thoughts to myself shorted out like wiring chewed by a neurological rat.

I held up my hands with a grin and slipped into the non-visible realm. The air around me shifted, like I had walked into an air-conditioned room after being outside in scorching hot weather.

Funny. You know I can still see you,” Luke said with a little tilt to his lips.

Wasn’t that the truth. Luke was the only person I couldn’t hide from. Of course, whether or not he wanted to find me was a whole other matter.

“What’s got you wound so tight?” I asked.

Luke shook his head, dark brown hair falling into his eyes. “You can’t feel it yet? The next job?”


  1. Lisa Gus here. I would love to see this one. Please send the query and the pages over to Great work!

  2. I would love to see more of this. Please send to thao(at)dijkstraagency(dot)com with subject line: QueryKombat - Coincidences.

  3. I'd love to read more! Please send your pages attached as a word document, with you query letter pasted into the email to: rena (at) thedeborahharrisagency (dot) com
    - Rena

  4. I'd love to see more of this one! Please send the pages and synopsis to caitlin (at) sll (dot) com with "Query Kombat" in the subject line.