Here is Query # 11:
Cage is a loner who (What about: A loner, Cage) haunts the streets of London with his trusty six-shooter, tracking down the vile monsters responsible for killing all his loved ones
Jessamine can't stand the mysterious man who fires upon her (man intent on killing her), but she's
London isn't safe anymore, and if Cage wants his revenge, and if Jessamine wants closure, they'll have to work together to not only save the city, but
ROSE AND WATCHES is a steampunk romance novel complete at 90K. (Yeah, I'm not getting the romance from this query. I was thinking steampunk western like Brandon Sanderson's The Alloy of Law.You really need more than the fact that she can't stand him.)
I am the author of a fantasy romance trilogy, Kingdom of Arnhem - Woman of Honor (2009), Knight of Glory (2010), and Champion of Valor (2011) published with Desert Breeze Publishing. Fifteen of my short works have appeared in various anthologies, including Holiday Magick by Spencer Hill Press. The first book in another trilogy, Black Hellebore, will be published in October by Desert Breeze Publishing. Impressive!
Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.
The main problem I have with this query is wordiness. It could use another run through to tidy it up. Plus, I got no sense of the stakes or the romance. How are the 'creatures' a danger to the whole city. That can be fixed with a bit of tweaking.