I'm going to give a blog hop of 1st Page Critiques a try! Everyone is welcome to join if you have a blog and a 1st page: Beginning writers to the published and agented!
Here's how it will work:
Post your first page onto your blog. It can be any genre or age category, but please list this crucial information at the top. Keep your first page to no more than 250 words, give or take a few. (That's a few. Not ten.) No indents and put space between paragraphs. Example:
YA Epic Fantasy
Ramiro guided his horse to the waiting ranks of the pelotón, taking his position at the back of the long file of riders along the dusty road. Sweat slicked his palms inside his leather gloves. He maneuvered Sancha into position by carefully sidestepping the mare. In their rightful place, he laid the reins across his knee, signaling to the grito de guerra warhorse that he’d be using his legs to guide her, not the leather straps.
Ramiro wedged his feet in the stirrups as Alvito moved his mount alongside, pinning Ramiro between himself and Gomez. “Don’t look so pale,” Alvito said with a grin. “You’ll not earn your beard this day.” He stroked his own neatly sculpted black whiskers, adding a wink to cut the sting of his words.
From Ramiro’s other side, Sergeant Gomez gave him a playful push with a fist the size of a ham. The force would have knocked Ramiro off his saddle, if he hadn’t locked his legs. Gomez’s beard was a study in opposites from Alvito. A nest of brambles to his chest, his hair grew wherever it could sprout. “You’ll stay the bisoño until we tell you otherwise, kiddo.”
“Peach face,” someone said. A gentle ribbing to let Ramiro know they remembered his first real ride.
First ride. First time as something other than a trainee squire brought along to clean armor or mind the warhorses. First chance to earn his beard and be considered a man. Bare chin or not, he was a part of it now.
Take the url link from your post and add it to the linky list below. Use the list to critique the five people above and below your listing. If you are number 6 then you would feedback numbers 1,2,3,4,5,7,8,9,10,11 on the list. Please leave constructive criticism, but also say what you like about the piece. Don't worry if it's not your genre, just do your best to give your thoughts.
Of course you may also get super enthused and critique more than ten entries. Feel free to jump around and help out as much as you can!
Bonus: I will randomly choose entries from the linky list to feedback on my blog. (A few a week.) Please watch for these entries and leave additional feedback here. If no one else comments, I will cease and desist these bonus critiques.
You are welcome to update your 1st page post with revisions. The linky list will remain open through November 14th. After that time, you may not join. The bonus critiques will not include everyone. I will do as many as I can while still having time for my own editing.
If you fail to critique the five entries above and below your spot, well... that's sad and I'm sure karma will know.
Need more critiques? Advertise your willingness to give to get feedback on twitter under the hashtag #Fall1stHop
The fun starts immediately!